You know we have Tom in Oakland, right? You could maybe book some time with him to fix the last of what are, IMO, relatively minor issues.
Also, Paul Horn and Ness Oszast in LA? All of these three are far, far better than the moron in blue who wants you to GET SERIOUS and STAY TIGHT, as if you didn't already know to do these things. No offense if he's like, your brother, or something.
In any event, the only thing I see is the upper thoracic rounding when you pull, which means you're not actively pulling against the bar when you squeeze up. Really, this couple be fixed by Tom, Paul or Ness in about an hour. Also, you pull rep #2 off your heels. Note your arm angle when the bar comes off the floor, and your toes as you finish the rep.