I was holding my breath once you started your set. You really need to clean some stuff up, so sorry for sounding harsh.
Feet should never move during the set (Dat left foot). Never walk the rep into the rack. Grip was not symmetric. Horizontal component of COM was not fixed at all. Slow down the descent a tad.
You are still too upright in my opinion ie. knees too far forward.
Take some weight off, TUBOW, focus and use the master cue from the book.
Why are you doing doubles? I understand that certain groups do 5 triples in their LP, but doubles?